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1. Abstract: Background
Original:

The responsiveness and predictive validity of the Hierarchical Balance Short Forms (HBSF) in patients with stroke is unknown, which limits the HBSF’s utility in both clinical and research settings.

PTJ editing:

The lack of knowledge about the responsiveness and predictive validity of a set of Hierarchical Balance Short Forms (the HBSF) in people with stroke limits the utility of the HBSF in both clinical and research settings. 

2. Introduction: 

Original:

However, the BBS does not cover a wide range of balance function, such as items that are easy (e.g., sitting with trunk support) and difficult (e.g., hopping in place on the less affected foot). 

PTJ editing:

However, the BBS does not cover a wide range of balance function, such as items that are easy (e.g., sitting with trunk support) and items that are difficult (e.g., hopping in place on the less affected foot). 

3. Results:

Original:

Table 2 shows that the change in scores of the HBSF/PASS had fair association with that of the BI (r≧0.35). The association between change in scores of the HBSF/PASS and that of the MO-STREAM was moderate to good (r≧0.65).  

PTJ editing:

Table 2 shows a fair association (r≧0.35) between the changes in scores on the HBSF or the PASS and the changes in scores on the BI. The association between the changes in scores on the HBSF or the PASS and the changes in scores on the MO-STREAM was moderate to good (r≧0.65).

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